Brendan, The latest version is attached, and I've added some comments to your email below. Thank you for the suggestions! Steven On Thu, Aug 17, 2006 at 10:42:54PM -0500, Brendan Kiburg wrote: > Dear Steven, > Just a few points regarding the paper. > At the end of the first page, last paragraph, there is one line > concerning the detector. I am not sure if it goes here considering the > immediate return to physics discussion. You must mean the line that starts, "As shown in figure 1, the muCap..." I agree; It works better simply moved to the next paragraph. > > Also, you mention the terms muon detectors and electron detectors. > Maybe you could rephrase it to say something like: "Muon stops and > electron decays are detected by a series of wire chambers to provide > tracking information and fast scintillators to precisely measure the > timing." Here I only want a functional description of the muCap detector. > > Under muZ formation you say the mucap design eliminates impurity > captures to a high level in the following ways: Wall Stops, Transfers > to Gas Impurity, Transfer to Deuterium, then Diffusion. > The subject headings are the categories of potential pitfalls, not the > "ways" that the mucap design eliminates them, so maybe the headings > should change to the positive methods used: Wall Stops->Active Target , > Transfers to Gas impurity -> Cryogenic Absorbers + in situ monitoring, > Transfer... ->Deuterium Depleted Target . Alternatively you could > change the sentence to say something like : " the following problems > related to high z caputres are addressed by the mucap design", and leave > the headings the same. Yeah, you are absolutely correct. It now reads, "Impurity formation channels, and the muCap method to manage them, are listed below." > > Since I am unsure about the target audience, please feel free to ignore > if the comments/suggestions are not important. > Best Regards, > Brendan > > Steven Clayton wrote: > > >I have to upload my 3-page paper for the CIPANP2006 > >conference proceedings no later than tomorrow (Friday). > >If you have a chance before tomorrow afternoon, > >please have a look at the attached document. > > > >Thanks, > >Steven > > > >
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